What do you think of my story so far?

It's absolutely terrible. Not trying to be offensive, but it's badly written, grammar is awful, the plot (what there is) is awful. If it's trying to be shocking in anyway, it sincerely isn't. I'm hoping that two years ago, when you wrote it, you were about 10 years old, because if you were any older than that then you seriously need to concentrate on studying, or going back to school. It's probably one of the worst things that I have ever read, you should consider deleting this question, because no one in their right mind will possibly say that this is in any way good. I'm guessing though, by additional details, that you surely made this up as you went along, about 15 minutes ago. It's lame, simple as that.